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Do you feel me in your cells?
That pressure in your vein?
Do you feel the nagging itch
That edges right through pain?
You thought I was curable.
You'd forget me with a pill.
But looks like I'm not leaving,
And I think I never will.
Charming like bacteria,
That has suffered your onslaught.
I'm now invulnerable
To everything you've got.
Inject your poison in me
Try any method you please
I'll keep gnawing your insides:
Your dirty, heartsick disease.
Remember that you caused this,
when you lay yourself to sleep.
Remember you destroyed me,
Wasn't good enough to keep.
Understand, my memory
Is a clingy, viral thing
That lingers here, infecting
Giving guilt it's piercing sting
So while I'm gone far from you
This raw guilt will have it's start.
Tearing at your shaken mind
and next stop is your heart.
"I'll make you wish
You hadn't burned our time before
I'll live through this
In a manner cursed in my own accord

So come on, why aren't you laughing now?
....
And I don't wanna think of you.
No, I don't wanna think of you, anymore.
Tonight, Goodnight. Goodbye. "

The Writing Writer- Coheed and Cambria
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enslavedsphinx Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2007
Over 15 minutes of careful reading; feeling each line that breathes.
The prosopopoeia is so damn great!

Excellent!!!

Btw, it made me feel like this could be greatly sing in a "black metal" song. [So deep, the way I analyze at it.]
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SmilesAndSutures Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2007  Hobbyist Photographer
Wow, thanks a lot! I really appreciate that :)
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Saphire282 Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2007  Hobbyist Writer
oh wow... this is a really good piece. And very easy to understand and relate to. very well done
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SmilesAndSutures Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2007  Hobbyist Photographer
Thanks a lot!
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EternallyDejected Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2007
This is really good, it flows perfectly most of the time, great :clap:
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SmilesAndSutures Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2007  Hobbyist Photographer
:) Well, thank you!
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EternallyDejected Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2007
Well, you're welcome :D
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ClaudiaCasanova Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2007
This is amazing, I loved reading it, and relating:heart:
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SmilesAndSutures Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2007  Hobbyist Photographer
^_^

What an awesome thing to say. Thanks so much!
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GirlJackTheRipper Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2007
I love this. . .You've managed to keep a great rhythym going, without sacrificing any of the emotion. . .I've got some slow ass internet, but I saw the first lines on the front page and had to read the rest.

I'm adding this to my faves, and you to my watch. . .Gimme time and I'll hit ur gallery up.
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SmilesAndSutures Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2007  Hobbyist Photographer
Wow Thanks a lot ^_^ You made my day!
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Kahlia Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2007  Hobbyist Photographer
I completely identify with this. It has somewhat of a different feel from your other pieces-- its an effortless aggression without pity. I love the parasitic feel throughought.

So while I'm gone far from you
This raw guilt will have it's start.
Tearing at your shaken mind
and next stop is your heart.


Amazing, love.
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SmilesAndSutures Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2007  Hobbyist Photographer
I confess that different feel made me a bit nervous. But it was one of those "I have to write this, now" moments. An emotional purging, I guess, typed out in notes to myself on my cell phone while working. One of these days my boss is going to catch me ^_^ That's going to be fun to explain.

Thank you so much. :glomp: You always leave the best comments.
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Kahlia Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2007  Hobbyist Photographer
I know those moments. I love that you typed it out on your phone to keep it with you. Amazing, the things we do for our writing. :) Don't worry at all about the different feel-- It's perfect. :heart:
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yellowworm Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2006   Artisan Crafter
perfect timing....
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SmilesAndSutures Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2006  Hobbyist Photographer
You know the feeling then, eh? Uber thanks for the fav :thanks:
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noiamnot Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2006
Fan-freakin-tastic.
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SmilesAndSutures Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2006  Hobbyist Photographer
^_^!!!
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Hollilicious Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2006  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Yet another one of your poems that I personally identify with. You're good at that. =P
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SmilesAndSutures Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2006  Hobbyist Photographer
:hug:
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