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Do you feel me in your cells?
That pressure in your vein?
Do you feel the nagging itch
That edges right through pain?
You thought I was curable.
You'd forget me with a pill.
But looks like I'm not leaving,
And I think I never will.
Charming like bacteria,
That has suffered your onslaught.
I'm now invulnerable
To everything you've got.
Inject your poison in me
Try any method you please
I'll keep gnawing your insides:
Your dirty, heartsick disease.
Remember that you caused this,
when you lay yourself to sleep.
Remember you destroyed me,
Wasn't good enough to keep.
Understand, my memory
Is a clingy, viral thing
That lingers here, infecting
Giving guilt it's piercing sting
So while I'm gone far from you
This raw guilt will have it's start.
Tearing at your shaken mind
and next stop is your heart.
"I'll make you wish
You hadn't burned our time before
I'll live through this
In a manner cursed in my own accord

So come on, why aren't you laughing now?
....
And I don't wanna think of you.
No, I don't wanna think of you, anymore.
Tonight, Goodnight. Goodbye. "

The Writing Writer- Coheed and Cambria
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enslavedsphinx Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2007
Over 15 minutes of careful reading; feeling each line that breathes.
The prosopopoeia is so damn great!

Excellent!!!

Btw, it made me feel like this could be greatly sing in a "black metal" song. [So deep, the way I analyze at it.]
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SmilesAndSutures Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2007  Hobbyist Photographer
Wow, thanks a lot! I really appreciate that :)
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Saphire282 Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2007  Hobbyist Writer
oh wow... this is a really good piece. And very easy to understand and relate to. very well done
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SmilesAndSutures Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2007  Hobbyist Photographer
Thanks a lot!
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EternallyDejected Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2007
This is really good, it flows perfectly most of the time, great :clap:
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SmilesAndSutures Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2007  Hobbyist Photographer
:) Well, thank you!
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EternallyDejected Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2007
Well, you're welcome :D
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ClaudiaCasanova Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2007
This is amazing, I loved reading it, and relating:heart:
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SmilesAndSutures Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2007  Hobbyist Photographer
^_^

What an awesome thing to say. Thanks so much!
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GirlJackTheRipper Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2007
I love this. . .You've managed to keep a great rhythym going, without sacrificing any of the emotion. . .I've got some slow ass internet, but I saw the first lines on the front page and had to read the rest.

I'm adding this to my faves, and you to my watch. . .Gimme time and I'll hit ur gallery up.
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